Sample Novel Manuscript
This sample novel excerpt shows some of the ways in which novel format differs from short story format.
For one thing, a novel manuscript requires a separate title page.
Page numbering begins with 1 on the second page of the manuscript (the first page of actual text), and each chapter begins on its own page.
William Shunn (he/him)
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Silvertide
A Novel by Perry Slaughter
about 80,000 words
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Prologue
A Silver Tide
Carl McFarland stood beneath a motionless white canopy at
his father’s funeral, one arm around his wife’s waist. The
western Nevada desert was hot and dry as a kiln--over forty
Celsius just past noon, and him in a black wool suit. He put his
free hand in his pocket. Beneath his wadded-up computer he found
the small, cold syringe that could end this whole charade. Dead
clay fired in the sun, this tool could restore to life.
Pastor Kittridge, his father’s assistant, read from a large
hardcopy Bible beside the open grave, in a voice that carried to
all the crowd: “‘In the sweat of thy face shalt thou eat bread,
till thou return unto the ground; for out of it wast thou taken:
for dust thou art, and unto dust shalt thou return.’”
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Carl felt as if he were breathing hot dust, even in the
shade, but he didn’t sweat. He probably needed water. He
watched Pastor Kittridge, in the full glare of the sun, mop his
forehead with a flannel handkerchief. It was summer solstice,
the longest day of the year.
“Thus spake the Lord unto Adam, our first father,” said the
young pastor, his high, smooth brow clenched against the sun. He
sounded less certain when he wasn’t quoting scripture. “Thus he
speaks to us all--even to our dear friend Pastor McFarland, a man
so good we can only give thanks he wasn’t taken home sooner.”
A high cloud veiled the sun, but Carl did not relax his
squint. There was no man more well-loved in Sun Forge than his
father. Pastor McFarland had been quick with a kind word, and
always had time to hear the smallest complaint or glad tiding.
He was a friend to everyone, not just his own congregation. The
hundreds of people spilling down the cemetery lawn, rustling and
broiling in their black clothes, bore testimony to that.
Of course, none of them had lived under the man’s roof, in
his zone of inattention. But neither had Carl, not for twenty-
three years.
His eyes began to sting. He tried to clutch Eileen more
tightly to him, but Hillary stirred in her arms and Eileen pulled
away to rock the little girl. Those six inches of separation
yawned like a chasm.
The syringe in Carl’s pocket burned with cold promise. He
blinked several times. It would be so easy to bring the old man
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back to life. Five steps across the cemetery lawn, a snap of the
catch on the casket lid, a swift injection of nanosolution, and
his father would rise again. Carl would lead him back to the
house on the ridge, and the two of them could sit down for a
companionable beer. His father could meet Eileen and Hillary.
But Carl’s legs refused to move.
“. . . and thus we prepare to return the earthly remains of
our dear friend and counselor to the dust from whence they came,”
Kittridge was saying, “comforted by the knowledge that what we
loved in Ian McFarland, and what loved us so purely in return,
has not died but lives on, and will one day rise up to be greeted
by his Savior, and will live and walk again amongst us all.”
Carl shook his head. Whatever constituted his father was
locked inside that casket in an organ slowing decaying to jelly.
There was only one way it would ever live and walk again.
He drew the syringe from his pocket.
Eileen’s veil brushed his ear. “Are you all right, Carl?”
she asked. Hillary had snuggled back down into sleep.
I’m forty years old, he thought. I’ve barely spoken to my
father since high school. I’ve never visited at all. Why would
he ever want to see me? With a sick sense of failing a test, he
slipped the syringe back into his pocket.
“Ian McFarland,” said Kittridge, head bowed, “you will be
sorely missed.” Almost too quietly for Carl to hear, he
repeated, “Sorely missed.”
The pastor nodded to Carl and moved to the far end of the
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grave. The two men from the funeral home--Benjamin Destry, an
old classmate of Carl’s, and his son Andrew--stepped into the
shade of the canopy. Andrew wore shades. Carl wondered what he
was watching. Benjamin, solemn and damp, handed Carl a matte-
black remote control with a single black button. “Just press it
when you’re ready,” he murmured, and stepped back.
Carl turned to Eileen. The concern in her eyes was real,
but the pale hair behind her veil was too like lifeless flesh in
color, and he looked away. Clustered around them under the
canopy and behind were all the people Carl had known growing up.
Finish this charade and be gone, they seemed to say, as if it
were Carl’s absence and not a failed heart that had put his
father into that casket. The crowd’s impatience pressed like the
heat of a blast furnace against his back, stifling and violent.
He lurched forward, into the sun.
The Sierra Nevada loomed behind him like an honor guard,
while ahead the desiccated skin of the desert stretched to the
horizon, unbroken but for the verdant thread of the Walker River
and the busy little score that was Highway 208. The cemetery
nestled in the foothills, where the last of the mountain greenery
broke like surf against the shore of the barrens. To his left,
just that side of river, sat the town of Sun Forge. It was
bigger than he recalled, but not by much, still a picturesque
village set amid hilly fields and orchards and sheep meadows.
Still a place too small and inimical to bear.
Lights sparkled here and there on the horizon, stingy
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pinches of diamond dust. Sunlight on distant windshields?
The smell of damp earth brought Carl’s gaze back to the
grave, the bed his father would occupy in a moment, for all time.
Carl wanted to lower his shoulder and rush the casket, hit it
with a tackle that would dump it down the gaping hole like trash
down a chute. His father was the one who’d ignored him all his
life. So why did he crave the old man’s forgiveness?
The syringe was a cold weight in his pocket, an anodyne to
the sun’s smelter. There was still time. He could do it. He
could bring his father back.
But then what? His father would be confused at first, maybe
angry when he learned what Carl had done. The mourners would
give them no chance to get away and talk. Picturing the bedlam
made Carl smile, but he would certainly go to jail when the Feds
learned what he’d done. And what would become of his father, a
reanimated corpse with two days’ worth of brain damage? He’d be
like a man with Alzheimer’s.
It was the same argument Carl had been through a dozen times
already. If he really meant to do it, he should have done it
after the viewing the night before, where at least there was some
privacy. But if he didn’t mean to do it, then why had he risked
stealing the Rapture solution from the lab in the first place and
smuggling it on the suborbital from Boston?
Impulsively he stabbed the remote control. The casket
lifted smoothly on the six small floater engines set into its
base. A sullen breeze washed Carl’s ankles. Guided and
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stabilized by infrared sensors, the casket moved into the empty
space over the grave and slowly descended. The syringe hung
heavy and impotent in Carl’s pocket.
As the casket vanished, Carl sensed a great sigh behind him,
as if the crowd had released its breath. Pastor Kittridge began
a prayer of dedication over the grave. Benjamin Destry gently
removed the remote control from Carl’s grasp, replacing it with a
gold-plated spade. “Throw in the first shovelful now,” said
Benjamin softly, placing a hand on Carl’s elbow.
Carl heard a buzzing in his ears. His last chance to speak
to his father was gone. He stared at the mound of dirt on the
far side of the grave, wondering how he was supposed to reach it
with that raw, loamy wound in the soil barring the way.
“Carl?” said Benjamin.
The buzz intensified, joined by a murmur like wind through
scattered paper. Carl turned his head. The mourners were
whispering, craning their faces toward the cemetery gates.
Eileen looked at Carl in confusion. Carl shrugged.
The sound resolved into the hum of a hydrogen motor, moments
before a battered Toyota pickup careened through the gates. Its
knobby tires clawed the grass as it fishtailed between monuments
and crooked headstones. The truck jerked to a stop as the crowd
scattered. Greg Winder--another aged but familiar face--hopped
down from the cab waving his arms. His face was pale beneath a
visored John Deere cap. “Ever’body gotta get away!” he cried.
“It’s comin’ from the east! It’s eatin’ ever’thin’!”
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Panicked mourners crowded around him, babbling. Carl lost
sight of him for several moments, until Greg climbed up into the
bed of the truck. Huge patches of sweat stained the armpits of
his chambray work shirt. “I just come up 208 from Yerington,” he
shouted over the crowd. “It was--good Lord, it was swallerin’
the whole damn town! Cars, houses, trees, people, ever’thin’.
An’ it’s movin’ this way! We gotta head west--Tahoe, Bridgeport,
I don’t know. Maybe clear to the coast!”
Eileen clung tightly to Carl’s arm, clutching Hillary to her
chest. “What’s he talking about, Carl?” she demanded above the
commotion. “What’s going on?”
It was as close to hysteria as Carl had ever seen her. He
could only give his head a little shake as he reached for the
shades in his coat pocket. He noticed he wasn’t the only one
doing so. Time and temperature appeared in the upper left corner
of his vision when he put them on, hovering at a comfortable
apparent focal distance. He tapped the right earpiece for
headlines. NO FEED, read the display. Chilled, Carl folded the
shades and put them away again.
He noticed he wasn’t the only one doing so.
Kittridge plowed past Carl and Eileen, shouting for order.
Two dozen people were already past the gates, starting the cars
that crowded the narrow road to town. “What’s this all about,
Brother Greg?” the pastor called out, hands on his hips.
“There’s a burial service here. You’re frightening people.”
A short but powerfully built man with gray hair fought his
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way to the pastor’s side. “Yeah, Greg,” he said. It was Harold
Thomas, whom Carl had known growing up as one of the town’s four
police officers. “What kind of panic are you trying to start?”
Greg took a deep breath. “It’s some kinda--I don’t know, a
silver tide, like a huge film of mercury, comin’ outta the
northeast.” His boots rang on the bed of his truck as he paced.
“I tell you, it swallers whatever it touches, swarmin’ over
things like those ants in South America, and then--I don’t know,
it’s like it dissolves ’em. That’s all I saw. This was in
Yerington, and I didn’t stick around askin’ no questions.”
It seemed to Carl that his heart had stopped.
Harold said something else, but the noise of the crowd
swallowed his words. More people were running for the gates. A
chorus of car engines and horns clamored from the road beyond.
“We need to leave,” Eileen said, seizing Carl’s hand.
Hillary began to wail and paw at her eyes. “I knew we shouldn’t
have come here. Come on, Carl, let’s go!”
But Carl couldn’t move. He was shivering. The war between
calm heads and chaos swirled around him like Arctic wind. He
turned back toward his father’s grave as Eileen tugged at his
arm. Across the desert, past the shoulder of Sun Forge, he
scanned what he now realized was the unusually heavy traffic on
Highway 208. Sunfire danced on tiny windshields, but the quality
of the light was altogether different from the unfocused silver
sparkles massing on the horizon. As Carl watched, the sparkles
coalesced and ran together in a shimmering line, as if a second
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dawn were about to break.
“Oh, you must be kidding,” he murmured. What Greg Winder
had described could only have been one thing, but Carl had
refused to believe it until now. It was supposed to be safely
contained in Cambridge, yet here it was, or something like it.
“Scorched Earth.”
“What is it, Carl?” cried Eileen. “What are you talking
about?”
He yanked his arm out of her grip, watching the silver line
thicken and dim and spread. “Get to the car,” he said, not
looking at her. “Get it started, get Hillary strapped in, and
get ready to leave. Go!”
Eileen didn’t hesitate. Carl heard Hillary’s wail as they
plunged into the crowd, but he couldn’t tear his eyes from the
spreading chromium sea. So this is what it looks like to an
enemy army, he thought. This is the terror it was designed to
evoke.
He noticed the gold-plated spade still in his hands, and
hurled it with all his might into the open grave. It was hard
not to believe the old man had died when he did deliberately, so
his son would be here to see this. It was Carl’s punishment for
devoting his life to physics and spurning God.
In the inadequate shade of the canopy, Carl turned his back
on the desert, ashamed and angry.
Mourners clogged the cemetery gates, and several were
scaling the modest walls. Honking cars jammed the road beyond,
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where Harold Thomas was doing his best to direct traffic. Off-
road vehicles tried to skirt the knot on either side, while two
or three dual-passenger skyhoppers bounded away in long, shallow
arcs. Blocked by the crowd at the gates, Greg Winder’s truck
moved in fits and starts. Carl couldn’t see Eileen and Hillary,
but the spectacle set gears in motion in his head. He felt
himself grow calm. He looked back at the silver film, trying to
gauge its rate of advance.
A firm hand touched his arm. “I don’t understand this all,
Brother Carl,” said Kittridge, “but don’t you think you’d better
catch up with your family? The dead can bury their dead.”
Carl turned to the pastor, his father’s successor, confused
for a moment. In terms of age, Kittridge could have been an
actual brother. “We’re never going to outrun that stuff,” he
said, jerking his thumb over his shoulder, “not with this kind of
traffic. There’s probably, what, only fifteen or twenty
skyhoppers in town? They don’t work well at altitudes much
higher than this anyway. Maybe a couple of cropdusters out at
the airstrip? Most of us won’t get away in time.”
The pastor’s eyes had strayed to the gleaming, burgeoning
tide. “Does that mean we shouldn’t try?” he asked reprovingly.
“‘He that endureth to the end shall be saved.’”
Having scripture quoted at him always made Carl feel
contrary. “Paul said to work out your own salvation with fear
and trembling. That’s what I plan to do.”
Pastor Kittridge turned to Carl with eyes hard and hungry as
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cemetery marble. “You know something the rest of us don’t?”
Carl scratched his head and gestured at the nearby town.
“Pastor, did you ever dream of baptizing all of Sun Forge?”
Impatiently the pastor shook his head. “What does that have
to do with anything?”
“Now’s your chance,” Carl said. “Water’s the only thing
liable to hold that stuff off.”
“Water?”
“We can probably save the town, but we need to soak down
everything. And I mean everything. Come on.”
With a plan in mind Carl felt better. Not happy, but no
longer helpless at least. He led the startled pastor at a trot
out from under the canopy and across the lawn, between headstones
bent and yellowed like broken teeth, through the mingled smells
of mulch and dust and, faintly, ozone. Harold Thomas stood
outside the gates, shades on, shouting instructions to someone
invisible while he continued directing traffic. To save Sun
Forge and all their lives, they would need Harold’s help.
“I hope you’re happy, Dad,” Carl growled, sensing the future
contracting around him. He was home again and likely to stay a
long while, if not what remained of his life.
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Part I
Chapter 1
A Snowy Dove
Jenna Kemp, mayor of Sun Forge, folded her thinkrag in half
and pushed it away. She sat back in her chair, staring down the
length of the conference table. It was morning and she was alone
in the council chamber, which was probably a blessing. Had
anyone else been present, she couldn’t have hidden her
uneasiness, and uneasiness made her surly and fractious.
The latest harvest figures were in, and C-ration numbers
were down over the previous year. Heavy snows in winter always
meant slower regrowth in the spring, but even taking that into
account, Jenna foresaw trouble. There was still enough wheat,
milk, and eggs to supplement the rations, but there might not be
the next year, or the year after.
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That was if the harvesters stayed within a kilometer of the
moat, of course. They could venture farther out into the
barrens, but that required progressively more water. It might be
all right this year since the snow pack in the mountains was so
high, but what would happen after the next dry winter? The
choice might come down to gathering food or maintaining the moat,
and that was no choice at all.
Jenna sighed. The root problem was simple: Sun Forge was
exceeding its ideal population. They took more raw materials out
of the barrens in the form of food, clothing, and other supplies
than they put back in waste and dead bodies. But when things
were going well people didn’t want to hear about birth control,
and those first-aid kits with the condoms in them didn’t show up
very often anyway. They had no equipment for safe abortions, but
that hardly mattered. Religiously the town had gone so far
overboard in the past twenty years that mention of the word might
get her thrown out of office, if not over the moat.
Maybe it was time to start encouraging exploration again.
Early on, it seemed every young person in town had wanted to face
the barrens one on one, and half of those who left never came
back. Jenna had gone out twice herself when she was still full
of juice. But as the years slipped by, as the satellite news
worsened and it became increasingly clear that no rescue was
coming, as the U.N. quarantine of North America took effect,
these missions had slowly tapered off. There didn’t seem to be
any point. No one but Carl McFarland and his little buddy Orrin
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Pritchard had traveled more than a kilometer into the barrens in
over a decade.
Elbows on the table, Jenna ran her hands through her curly,
graying hair. She’d been sixteen when the tide came in; fifty-
six was an age she had never expected to see. There’d been times
when the town was so close to collapse that another year seemed
too much to hope for, let alone another month. Every day was a
battle, but at least rescue had seemed possible. Now Jenna was
tired and stability her fondest wish. Her dreams of escape from
Sun Forge were long dead.
She pushed her chair back roughly from the conference table.
She didn’t want to deal with problems like this anymore, but if
she didn’t then who would? The majority of the town’s twenty-
three hundred residents were under forty. They had no idea what
life was like before the tide. C-rations and army fatigues were
all they’d ever known for food and clothing, and since few of
them paid attention to the news, their world was no larger than
the harvest zone outside the moat. Who could do this job if she
didn’t? Who would do it when she was gone? The council was
worthless, including her husband Ray, and no one younger seemed
interested in taking over for them.
Cold morning sunlight streamed in through the picture
windows, picking out a century’s nicks and scars on the surface
of the conference table. Tree branches speckled with tiny new
buds threw their stark shadows into the room. Jenna pushed the
folded computer into a patch of sunlight to recharge, then
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reached into the breast pocket of her camouflaged shirt. She
took out a tattered holo of her father, Harold Thomas.
Jenna smoothed out the dog-eared, foil-backed picture in
another slanting sunbeam. Her father’s head and shoulders
appeared, solid and in full color, only faintly blurry, seeming
to extend far deeper than the thickness of the foil. Jenna had
inherited her mother’s nose, mouth, and hair, but her gray eyes
and stocky build came straight from her father. “What would you
tell me if you were here, Dad?” Jenna asked. “What would you
tell me to do?”
Probably not much of anything. Her father would be in his
nineties if he were still alive--but then again, they might not
be here if her father were still alive. The day the tide came
in, Harold Thomas had been all for hightailing it out of town.
It was McFarland, the so-called expert, who convinced him to dig
in and fight. Her father died that same afternoon when an
airborne puff of silver hit him full in the face. It swarmed
over his head and down his throat, smothering him to death before
anyone could douse him with water.
Jenna had watched it happen. She still woke up soaked some
nights, her father’s head bright in her mind’s eye, gleaming like
some fearsome liquid robot’s, slowly shrinking, dissolving, as
its gaping mouth opened wide in a silent cry. Mostly the head
was her father’s, but sometimes it was her own.
If only McFarland hadn’t interfered, the whole family might
have gotten safely to Lake Tahoe, or even to the coast. Jenna
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had never forgiven him for that, and she knew she never would.
Her father’s holo flickered in and out of solidity as a
fluttering of dark shadows eclipsed the sunlight. Something
tapped at the window--a bird, apparently attracted by its own
reflection. At first the sun swallowed its color and shape, but
when it settled down on the ledge and furled its wings, Jenna saw
that it was a white dove.
Chills raced up her spine. She tucked the holo into her
pocket and pushed her chair back slowly, never taking her eyes
from the window. Her legs trembled as she crossed the room and
cracked the door. “Jim! Silvia!” she called softly. “Come here
a minute! Quick!”
As Jenna sat down again, she heard the thumping of Jim
Ivie’s crutch. The door swung open.
“Shh, shh, shh,” Jenna said, waving her hands. “No sudden
moves. Don’t scare it away.”
Jim, who ran the resource pool, moved carefully into the
room. He was about thirty-five, but the freckles scattered
across his nose and cheeks made him look younger. His square,
handsome face seemed creased in a perpetual smile. He leaned on
a single homemade wooden crutch. The left leg of his khaki
fatigues hung pinned shut and empty. “Don’t scare what away?”
“The bird, the bird,” Jenna said excitedly.
“Oh, wow.” Jim leaned his crutch against the table and
eased himself into one of the council chairs. The dove preened
itself on the ledge. “That’s really pretty, Mayor. What kind of
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bird is it?”
“You don’t recognize it?”
Jim shook his head. “Looks kind of like a pigeon, but not
quite. Wasn’t it Glenda Jones used to keep some pigeons on
Lovelock Street?”
Jenna nodded, barely keeping herself in her chair. “Filthy
birds,” she said. “But not this one. Not this one.”
“What is it? Where did it come from?”
Lord, what a dull man, Jenna thought. Strong, brave,
dependable, but dull as a cat’s scratching post. The dove
strutted on the ledge, its chest puffed out as if it were
courting its own reflection. Jenna pointed at it, trying to
still the shaking in her hand. “You don’t know anyone in town
who has a bird like that, do you?”
“I didn’t think anyone had birds anymore,” Jim said. “’Less
you mean chickens or turkeys. This sure is a pretty one, though.
What kind did you say it was?”
Silvia Gonsalves entered the room. She was a thick,
matronly woman near fifty, with dark hair pulled back in a severe
bun. She ran the supply room across the lobby. “I’m sorry I
took so long, Mayor,” she said. “I was in the middle of--”
Three steps into the council chamber, Silvia blanched and dropped
to one knee. “El Espiritu Santo,” she said, crossing herself.
“So you know what it is, too.” Jenna rose from her chair to
approach the window. Bright coins of sunlight, reflections from
the silvery sea beyond the moat, flashed between the houses and
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trees lining the next street. Jenna had to squint to study the
bird. She glanced over her shoulder. “You recognize it.”
Silvia nodded, an overstuffed olive in her green fatigues.
“I know it from the stained glass window at St. Mark’s, the scene
where John baptizes Jesus. It is the sign of the Holy Spirit--
the dove.”
“A dove?” Ivie asked, reaching for his crutch. “You’ve got
to be kidding. Where in the world would a dove have come from?”
He stood up, trying to peer past Jenna at the miraculous bird.
“My gosh, I’ve never seen one before. That’s something.”
“Yes, it’s really something,” murmured Jenna. The bird was
cleanly, brilliantly white, brighter far than the whitewashed
walls of the council chamber. As a girl Jenna had dreamed of
astronautics--seeing Earth from orbit, living on the Moon or in
the Mars colony, or cataloguing the asteroids. Now she felt much
the same excitement. “There’s another dove in the Bible, you
know,” she said. “It’s the one Noah sent out from the ark to
find dry land.”
Jenna and the others watched the dove in reverent silence,
until, startled by who knew what, it flapped away in a white
flurry.
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